101 學 測 英文 作文

壹、前言

本年度學科能力測驗閱卷組，酌選考生作文佳作英文考科十五篇，經徵詢考生同意後，以原卷影像檔及其簡要評分說明提供各界參考。讀者如有寶貴意見，謹請來函指教。(郵寄地址：106台北市大安區舟山路237號 大學入學考試中心閱卷組收；傳真電話：02-23661149)

貳、英文考科作文佳作說明

整體而言，以下十五篇英文作文佳作示例，在內容方面皆符合題意，具體表達書信之勸告目的；文章組織完整，文意連貫性佳；文法、句構、用字、拼字、體例大致正確，並符合英文書信格式，稱呼與署名正確無誤。各篇說明如下：

英文考科佳作

對考生而言，在考試時間壓力下，能夠以流暢的文字，寫出一篇內容豐富並符合題意要求的作文，實屬難得！這十五篇英文作文雖然不免在詞彙、文法、句子結構與拼字、體例的掌握上或許仍有些許的缺失，但仍屬佳作，值得大家學習。同學平日宜藉由多元的管道，廣泛閱讀英文文章，並遵循老師的教導，勤於練習，藉由累積寫作經驗以發揮實力。

今天我們再接再厲來看看學測英文作文的第三種出題形式—書信寫作吧。書信寫作可概分成正式和非正式兩類。前者包括一般商業信函、求職信和推薦信等。而後者則以私人社交信函為主。兩者在格式和標點符號上稍有不同，請見下表。

接下來和大家分享衝刺教學同學以101年學測英文作文為題所寫成的非正式書信一篇。

題目：你最好的朋友最近迷上電玩，因此常常熬夜，疏忽課業，並受到父母的責罵。你（英文名字必須假設為 Jack 或 Jill）打算寫一封信給他/她（英文名字必須假設為 Ken 或 Barbie），適當地給予勸告。注意：必須使用上述的Jack或Jill在信末署名，不得使用自己的真實中文或英文名字。

感謝「大學堂英文學測衝刺教學」東山高中陳同學的分享

初稿：老師於課堂上講解寫作方向，提示詞彙片語後，請同學於週間完成初稿，並寄至學測衝刺教學指定信箱。

Oct. 25, 2014

（評）第一段的弱點在於陳述邏輯有些零亂，建議調動句子順序，如：我寫這封信是因為我很擔心你 ＞ 你最近沉迷於線上遊戲，因而在學校…（點出不對勁的項目）＞你爸媽也很擔心你 ＞ 從你爸媽那得知你在家…（點出不對勁的項目）。

I know that you are a perfectionist. When you can’t attain excellence, you become anxious and depressed. And when your performance can’t meet your parents’ high expectations, you seem to lose confidence in yourself. That is why you turn to the Internet for temporary release of pressure. However, after you get off the computer, you face the same problems. As your friend, I think you don’t have to be the best every time to be successful. We all learn through trials and errors. （評）加入一句 「失敗只是暫時的，只是通往成功的道路上的小插曲」這樣會更好，進而建議朋友要學著容忍暫時的不完美。I think there are other ways to relieve pressure such as playing basketball or seeing a movie. （評）突然從上ㄧ句「接受不完美」到這一句「抒壓」太過跳躍，要加過渡。Why not take up your old hobbies that give you a great sense of achievement? To fight your Internet addiction, you might try setting reasonable Internet use time and stick to it. The offline world offers much more interesting activities for you to experience and explore. （評）結尾太弱。Why 那句著重「抒壓」，To fight 這句提到「力抗沉迷網路遊戲的方法」，最後The offline 這句又點到「真實世界比線上虛擬世界更有趣」，三個分散且不連貫的點，結尾顯得雜亂無力。

Your friend,
Jack

二修：下周上課，老師領著同學一起完成細部調整，調整方向涵蓋用字 / 文法 / 句型 / 文章結構 / 劇情邏輯等等，二修即最終定稿。定稿後，學生接著背誦自己的文章，將單字句構進一步內化。

Oct. 25, 2014

Also, I heard from your parents that on weekends, you would play for over twenty hours straight, as if possessed by some mysterious outside force. You skipped meals altogether and avoided bathing or using the bathroom for fear of missing one second of the game. When they shut the game off, you freaked out and went ballistic. Obviously, you have lost yourself within a virtual world and neglected many of your real-world priorities. I am concerned that constant gaming would eventually take a heavy toll on your health, studies and relationships.

I know that you are sort of a perfectionist. Stress accumulates when you don’t attain excellence. With the college entrance exam fast approaching, you shoulder even more pressure than ever. Therefore, you turn to those thrilling online games for temporary stress relief. Yet, I think there is a fine line between entertainment and a full-blown addiction. As your best friend, I would like to see you overcome your Internet addiction and get your life back in order. I can’t tell you how much I miss the witty old Ken, who struck a good balance between study, leisure, and social life. Above all, there are many better ways to keep stress at bay other than indulging yourself in online gaming. Why not take up your old hobbies that give you a great sense of achievement? Why not resume practice with the school basketball team? All your teammates and fans who nickname you “The Savior” await anxiously for your return. Promise me that you would start setting reasonable Internet use time and wane yourself off gaming as soon as possible. And I want you to know that you can always count on me. Whenever you need someone to confide in or share your burden, I will always be on your side because this is what friends are for. Once you break the vicious cycle of the Internet addiction, you are sure to find that the offline world offers much more interesting activities for you to explore, experience and enjoy!

Your friend,
Jack